Question

use what you have learned in this lesson to revise the following passage for the appropriate audience and impact. select words and phrases that will strengthen this critical analysis essay.
in the declaration of independence, thomas jefferson talks about independence
supports independence ▼ through his use of big words and fancy argument skills
formal english and classical argumentative structure▼. first, jefferson states his thesis, which makes it seem important that the colonists get suggests that the colonies should have▼ independence. next, jefferson gives evidence against the king of england and how he mistreats the american colonies
▼.
references his mistreatment of the american colonies
suggests that the king is bad
highlights the kings less - than - ideal behavior
finally, jefferson suggests that colonists should ▼, which is the obvious answer

Explanation:

1. For the first dropdown: "formal English and classical argumentative structure" is precise, academic language suitable for a critical analysis, replacing the informal "big words and fancy argument skills".
2. For the second dropdown: "suggests that the colonies should have" is a formal, analytical phrasing that fits an academic essay, replacing the casual "seem important that the colonists get".
3. For the third dropdown: "references his mistreatment of the American colonies" is the most formal and accurate academic phrasing, matching the tone of a critical analysis better than the overly simplistic alternatives.
4. For the final dropdown (implied context): A formal, academic phrase like "declare their independence" would replace the informal "which is the obvious answer" to maintain the critical analysis tone, as it logically follows Jefferson's evidence of the king's mistreatment.

Answer:

Revised passage:
In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson talks about independence supports independence through his use of formal English and classical argumentative structure. First, Jefferson states his thesis, which suggests that the colonies should have independence. Next, Jefferson gives evidence against the king of England and how he references his mistreatment of the American colonies. Finally, Jefferson suggests that colonists should declare their independence, which aligns with the critical analysis tone.