(1) i am writing to you today to try and con. vince you to provide a discount for students wanting to buy…

(1) i am writing to you today to try and con. vince you to provide a discount for students wanting to buy one of your helmets. (2) a growing number of states across the country including california and new jersey. have passed laws that require people who use in - line skates and skateboards to wear a helmet. (3) although some skaters are unhappy about these changes, these laws are based on common sense and logic. (4) i believe if the helmets could be purchased for less money, students would be more willing to buy them. (5) learning how to ride a skateboard or inline skates are similar to learning how to ride a bicycle. (6) in the beginning, it can mean repeated stumbles and falls. (7) knees and elbows are usually the first to get scraped up, they typically heal quickly. (8) likewise, head injuries are more severe - they can even prove deadly. (9) even a low - speed fall can do considerable damage, and the head has to be protected, and the right helmet - hopefully purchased from your store - can do just that if worn properly. (10) please consider providing a discount so that more students have the opportunity to be safe. best, kristin zajchenko 44. sentence 9: even a low - speed fall can do considerable damage, and the head has to be protected, and the right helmet hopefully purchased from your store - can do just that if worn properly. which of the following would be the best way to revise sentence 9? o a change the dashes to commas o b split it into two sentences o c change the commas to semicolons o d remove the first clause

(1) i am writing to you today to try and con. vince you to provide a discount for students wanting to buy one of your helmets. (2) a growing number of states across the country including california and new jersey. have passed laws that require people who use in - line skates and skateboards to wear a helmet. (3) although some skaters are unhappy about these changes, these laws are based on common sense and logic. (4) i believe if the helmets could be purchased for less money, students would be more willing to buy them. (5) learning how to ride a skateboard or inline skates are similar to learning how to ride a bicycle. (6) in the beginning, it can mean repeated stumbles and falls. (7) knees and elbows are usually the first to get scraped up, they typically heal quickly. (8) likewise, head injuries are more severe - they can even prove deadly. (9) even a low - speed fall can do considerable damage, and the head has to be protected, and the right helmet - hopefully purchased from your store - can do just that if worn properly. (10) please consider providing a discount so that more students have the opportunity to be safe. best, kristin zajchenko 44. sentence 9: even a low - speed fall can do considerable damage, and the head has to be protected, and the right helmet hopefully purchased from your store - can do just that if worn properly. which of the following would be the best way to revise sentence 9? o a change the dashes to commas o b split it into two sentences o c change the commas to semicolons o d remove the first clause

Answer

Brief Explanations:

The sentence is long and complex. Splitting it into two sentences would improve readability. Changing dashes to commas or commas to semicolons doesn't solve the length - issue. Removing the first clause would change the meaning.

Answer:

B. split it into two sentences