the following is a student draft. it may contain errors.\n(1) tent, tarp, sleeping bags, backpacks, warm…

the following is a student draft. it may contain errors.\n(1) tent, tarp, sleeping bags, backpacks, warm clothes (for those cool mountain nights), two coolers (one with sodas for the drive), a shopping - bag full of marshmallows, hot dogs and hamburger buns, chips—yup, it looked like we had everything.\n(2) we said goodbye to my mom and sister and headed out.\n(3) this was going to be great—just my dad and i hiking, camping, and roasting marshmallows for three whole days. (4) the sun was just coming up as we pulled onto the road.\n(5) the drive across the valley to cascade lakes took about three hours, and theres not much to see. (6) its mostly just straight flat highway through mile after mile of tomato fields. (7) i told my dad that someone must like ketchup more than i do. (8) he laughed.\n(9) but then he reminded that id rather have ranch for my french fries and pizza sauce. (10) i couldnt argue with that.\n(11) when we got to our campground, it was already crowded.\n(12) nonetheless, by some miracle, there was one open right across from the showers. (13) someone must have just left the campground. (14) we grabbed the spot, jumped out of the car and breathed in the mountain air. (15) after putting the food on the picnic table, we got to work setting up the tent. (16) that done, we built a fire at the grate and roasted hot dogs for an early lunch.\n(17) that afternoon, the whole next day, and the morning of the day after that, we hiked and swam and canoed during the day and roasted dogs and hamburgers and marshmallows in the evenings. (18) and we talked. (19) my dad told me stories of the things he did when he was my age and what it was like growing up back then. (20) i told him the things i wanted to do with my life.\n(21) on the drive home, we were both pretty quiet. (22) we were tired. (23) but it was a good kind of tired. (24) we had\n5\nselect the correct answer\nhow could sentence 11 be revised to better transition to sentence 12 and describe what the campground was like when the narrator arrived?\na. when we got to our campground, it was only mid - morning, but the campsites were already filling up fast.\nb. when we got to our campground, most of the campsites were already taken by people who got there earlier.\nc. when we got to our campground, it was already crowded, and we knew we should have left earlier.\nd. when we got to our campground, there were people everywhere trying to grab a campsite.

the following is a student draft. it may contain errors.\n(1) tent, tarp, sleeping bags, backpacks, warm clothes (for those cool mountain nights), two coolers (one with sodas for the drive), a shopping - bag full of marshmallows, hot dogs and hamburger buns, chips—yup, it looked like we had everything.\n(2) we said goodbye to my mom and sister and headed out.\n(3) this was going to be great—just my dad and i hiking, camping, and roasting marshmallows for three whole days. (4) the sun was just coming up as we pulled onto the road.\n(5) the drive across the valley to cascade lakes took about three hours, and theres not much to see. (6) its mostly just straight flat highway through mile after mile of tomato fields. (7) i told my dad that someone must like ketchup more than i do. (8) he laughed.\n(9) but then he reminded that id rather have ranch for my french fries and pizza sauce. (10) i couldnt argue with that.\n(11) when we got to our campground, it was already crowded.\n(12) nonetheless, by some miracle, there was one open right across from the showers. (13) someone must have just left the campground. (14) we grabbed the spot, jumped out of the car and breathed in the mountain air. (15) after putting the food on the picnic table, we got to work setting up the tent. (16) that done, we built a fire at the grate and roasted hot dogs for an early lunch.\n(17) that afternoon, the whole next day, and the morning of the day after that, we hiked and swam and canoed during the day and roasted dogs and hamburgers and marshmallows in the evenings. (18) and we talked. (19) my dad told me stories of the things he did when he was my age and what it was like growing up back then. (20) i told him the things i wanted to do with my life.\n(21) on the drive home, we were both pretty quiet. (22) we were tired. (23) but it was a good kind of tired. (24) we had\n5\nselect the correct answer\nhow could sentence 11 be revised to better transition to sentence 12 and describe what the campground was like when the narrator arrived?\na. when we got to our campground, it was only mid - morning, but the campsites were already filling up fast.\nb. when we got to our campground, most of the campsites were already taken by people who got there earlier.\nc. when we got to our campground, it was already crowded, and we knew we should have left earlier.\nd. when we got to our campground, there were people everywhere trying to grab a campsite.

Answer

Brief Explanations:

To better transition to sentence 12 and describe the campsite, we need a statement that emphasizes the crowded - ness and sets the scene. Option D does this by stating that there were people everywhere trying to grab a campsite, which directly leads into the discovery of the open spot in sentence 12. Options A and B focus more on the time and the fact that campsites were filling up or taken, but not as vividly on the crowded state. Option C focuses on the thought of leaving earlier rather than just describing the scene.

Answer:

D. When we got to our campground, there were people everywhere trying to grab a campsite.