(1) gwen and i broke up only two months ago after a whole year together. (2) early in our relationship, we…

(1) gwen and i broke up only two months ago after a whole year together. (2) early in our relationship, we had had many good times. (3) after that, though, being unhappy seemed much more frequent than the happy times that we spent together. (4) often, it seemed, gwen was angry at me, and when she was angry, she started a fight. (5) the pattern was almost always the same. (6) first, she would scream curses, then she would slam doors, and then she would throw things. (7) after i accepted her apologies and she worms her way back into my heart twice, i finally kicked her out. (8) for a few weeks, she had called crying several times a day, begging to come back, claiming to miss me. (9) the real reasons were that her parents house was cramped, her brother was driving her crazy, and her mothers many rules. (10) i managed to stay strong and refused to take her back. (11) i am glad that i did, because last week i met lola through my friend nick. (12) nick had often talked about lola, and i liked her right away. (13) a new part - time student at our school, lola is funny, a kind person, smart, and attractive. (14) remembering how things started out with gwen, i do not know what will happen between me and lola. (15) however, a new relationship with promise is far better than me being in an old relationship that i know has no promise. which sentence should be revised to improve parallelism? sentence 3 sentence 6 sentence 4 sentence 1

(1) gwen and i broke up only two months ago after a whole year together. (2) early in our relationship, we had had many good times. (3) after that, though, being unhappy seemed much more frequent than the happy times that we spent together. (4) often, it seemed, gwen was angry at me, and when she was angry, she started a fight. (5) the pattern was almost always the same. (6) first, she would scream curses, then she would slam doors, and then she would throw things. (7) after i accepted her apologies and she worms her way back into my heart twice, i finally kicked her out. (8) for a few weeks, she had called crying several times a day, begging to come back, claiming to miss me. (9) the real reasons were that her parents house was cramped, her brother was driving her crazy, and her mothers many rules. (10) i managed to stay strong and refused to take her back. (11) i am glad that i did, because last week i met lola through my friend nick. (12) nick had often talked about lola, and i liked her right away. (13) a new part - time student at our school, lola is funny, a kind person, smart, and attractive. (14) remembering how things started out with gwen, i do not know what will happen between me and lola. (15) however, a new relationship with promise is far better than me being in an old relationship that i know has no promise. which sentence should be revised to improve parallelism? sentence 3 sentence 6 sentence 4 sentence 1

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Brief Explanations:

Parallelism means using the same grammatical structure in a series of words, phrases, or clauses. In sentence 4, “Gwen was angry at me” (subject - verb - adjective - prepositional phrase) and “when she was angry, she started a fight” (adverbial clause - subject - verb - object) have different structures. It should be revised to have a more parallel form.

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sentence 4