read the rough - draft paragraph.\npopcorn first gained popularity in the united states during the great…

read the rough - draft paragraph.\npopcorn first gained popularity in the united states during the great depression. sugar had become an expensive commodity that most americans could no longer afford. so, instead of snacking on sweet candies, people turned to popped corn for a satisfying snack. a dash of salt and a sprinkle of melted butter made the treat delicious and hard to resist. of course, they should have skipped the salt and butter, but they didnt really know about the potential health problems of these additions. the dangers of salt and trans fats has only recently been uncovered. thankfully, we have the knowledge we need to make healthy decisions about the foods we eat.\nwhich revision would most improve this paragraph?\nadding a topic sentence to the paragraph\nrewriting sentences that stray from the focus of the paragraph\nfixing spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors in the paragraph\nadding transitions to connect ideas within the paragraph

read the rough - draft paragraph.\npopcorn first gained popularity in the united states during the great depression. sugar had become an expensive commodity that most americans could no longer afford. so, instead of snacking on sweet candies, people turned to popped corn for a satisfying snack. a dash of salt and a sprinkle of melted butter made the treat delicious and hard to resist. of course, they should have skipped the salt and butter, but they didnt really know about the potential health problems of these additions. the dangers of salt and trans fats has only recently been uncovered. thankfully, we have the knowledge we need to make healthy decisions about the foods we eat.\nwhich revision would most improve this paragraph?\nadding a topic sentence to the paragraph\nrewriting sentences that stray from the focus of the paragraph\nfixing spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors in the paragraph\nadding transitions to connect ideas within the paragraph

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The paragraph starts with popcorn's popularity in the Great Depression. Then it talks about sugar being expensive and people turning to popcorn. But then it goes off - topic to discuss the health problems of salt and butter and making healthy food decisions. These sentences (about health problems and healthy decisions) stray from the main focus of popcorn's popularity during the Great Depression.

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rewriting sentences that stray from the focus of the paragraph