read the two introductory paragraphs representing a first draft and a revision of a narrative about making a…

read the two introductory paragraphs representing a first draft and a revision of a narrative about making a difficult choice.\nfirst draft: last week, i won two tickets to see the hottest band in the country perform. i will never forget the anticipation i felt waiting to find out if i was the lucky caller. the only problem was that i would have to choose who to go with me: jackie or sharon.\nrevision: last week, i won two tickets to see the hottest band in the country perform. i was on pins and needles as i hung on the line, dying to see if i was the lucky caller. the only problem was that i would be forced to make a choice between my two best friends. should i invite jackie or sharon?\nwhat types of descriptive language strengthen the revision?\n○ hyperbole and figurative language\n○ sensory details and precise adjectives\n○ simile and figurative language\n○ metaphor and strong verbs

read the two introductory paragraphs representing a first draft and a revision of a narrative about making a difficult choice.\nfirst draft: last week, i won two tickets to see the hottest band in the country perform. i will never forget the anticipation i felt waiting to find out if i was the lucky caller. the only problem was that i would have to choose who to go with me: jackie or sharon.\nrevision: last week, i won two tickets to see the hottest band in the country perform. i was on pins and needles as i hung on the line, dying to see if i was the lucky caller. the only problem was that i would be forced to make a choice between my two best friends. should i invite jackie or sharon?\nwhat types of descriptive language strengthen the revision?\n○ hyperbole and figurative language\n○ sensory details and precise adjectives\n○ simile and figurative language\n○ metaphor and strong verbs

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In the revision, phrases like "on pins and needles" and "dying to see" are sensory - evoking, and words are more precise compared to the first draft. Sensory details make the narrative more vivid and precise adjectives add clarity.

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sensory details and precise adjectives