Question

thursday: paragraph edit directions: use the chart to the right to identify as many mistakes as you can. be prepared to share! laurie hernandez is a former america artistic gymnast of puerto rican heritage, born on june 9 2000 in new brunswick new jersey. she became nationally known in 2016 when she helped lead team usas “final five” to win the gold medal at the rio olympics and earned an individual silver medal on the balance beam. proud of her cultural roots, hernandez has often spoken about representing the latino community on the world stage. after the olympics, she won dancing with the stars, wrote motivational books, and became a advocate for mental health and self - confidence among young athletes. although she retired from elite gymnastics in 2021 her legacy continues to inspire people around the world.

Explanation:

1. "America" should be "American".
2. "puerto rican" should be "Puerto Rican" (capitalize proper nouns).
3. "New Brunswick New Jersey" should be "New Brunswick, New Jersey" (add comma between city and state).
4. "Team USAs" should be "Team USA's" (add apostrophe for possessive).
5. "rio" should be "Rio" (capitalize proper noun).
6. "on the balance beam" - could add a comma after "beam" for better readability.
7. "After the Olympics, she won Dancing with the Stars, wrote motivational books, and became a..." - list items in a series should have consistent parallelism.
8. "Although she retired from elite gymnastics in 2021 her legacy" - should add a comma after "2021".

Answer:

1. "America" -> "American"
2. "puerto rican" -> "Puerto Rican"
3. "New Brunswick New Jersey" -> "New Brunswick, New Jersey"
4. "Team USAs" -> "Team USA's"
5. "rio" -> "Rio"
6. Consider adding comma after "beam" in "on the balance beam"
7. Ensure parallelism in list items
8. Add comma after "2021" in "Although she retired from elite gymnastics in 2021 her legacy"