Question

consistent use of active and passive voice
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with this essay, i was accepted to the united nations international school and placed in the eleventh grade and exams that were given to me.
with this essay, along with exams that were given to me, i was accepted to the united nations international school and i was placed in the eleventh grade.
with this essay and also along with exams that were given to me, i was accepted to the united nations international school and placed in the eleventh grade with this essay.
along with exams that were given to me, i was accepted to the united nations international school and placed in the eleventh grade with this essay.
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Explanation:

The original sentence has inconsistent use of active - passive voice. The correct option should have a consistent voice throughout. The first option has a mix where "I was accepted" (passive) and "exams that were given to me" (passive) are combined in a way that is a bit jumbled. The second option has a similar issue with the structure and voice - mixing. The third option is overly wordy and still has voice - related and structural problems. The fourth option "Along with exams that were given to me, I was accepted to the United Nations International School and placed in the eleventh grade" has a more consistent passive - voice structure and is more grammatically correct and clear in its construction.

Answer:

Along with exams that were given to me, I was accepted to the United Nations International School and placed in the eleventh grade.