day 2: editing & revising name: date:
have we become too reliant on electronics?
(1) there are many different arguments about becoming too reliant on electronics. (2) this could honestly go either way, and there are so many good things and an almost equal number of bad things that can be brought about by electronics. (3) it also depends upon how much electronics play into certain peoples lives because it could influence their opinions or their arguments towards this topic. (4) in my personal opinion, i do think that we have become too reliant on our electronics. (5) i understand that there are certain electronic things that we need in order to keep the world running and keep businesses and schools operating. (6) there are also certain things that are not consider a necessity but rather a want or desire. (7) these said wants or desires tend to become very controlling in our daily lives, and nobody seems to notice.
3. what is the most effective way to revise sentence 2?
a this could honestly go either way. there are so many good things and bad things that electronics can bring about.
b this could honestly go either way, and there are so many good things and bad things.
c there are so many good things; this could honestly go either way and an almost equal number of bad things.
4. how should sentence 6 be changed?
a change there to their
b change consider to considered
c insert a comma before but
d no change is needed.
article by: shawn (cc by 4.0) - some changes were made for educational purposes

Question

day 2: editing & revising  name:  date:
have we become too reliant on electronics?
(1) there are many different arguments about becoming too reliant on electronics. (2) this could honestly go either way, and there are so many good things and an almost equal number of bad things that can be brought about by electronics. (3) it also depends upon how much electronics play into certain peoples lives because it could influence their opinions or their arguments towards this topic. (4) in my personal opinion, i do think that we have become too reliant on our electronics. (5) i understand that there are certain electronic things that we need in order to keep the world running and keep businesses and schools operating. (6) there are also certain things that are not consider a necessity but rather a want or desire. (7) these said wants or desires tend to become very controlling in our daily lives, and nobody seems to notice.
3. what is the most effective way to revise sentence 2?
a this could honestly go either way. there are so many good things and bad things that electronics can bring about.
b this could honestly go either way, and there are so many good things and bad things.
c there are so many good things; this could honestly go either way and an almost equal number of bad things.
4. how should sentence 6 be changed?
a change there to their
b change consider to considered
c insert a comma before but
d no change is needed.
article by: shawn (cc by 4.0) - some changes were made for educational purposes

Accepted Answer

# Brief Explanations:
For question 3: The original sentence 2 is wordy and repetitive. Option A clarifies the phrasing by stating "that electronics can bring about" at the end, making the sentence clearer and more concise while retaining the original meaning without unnecessary repetition.
For question 4: Sentence 6 has a passive voice error: "are not consider a necessity" should use the past participle "considered" to form the correct passive structure. Option B fixes this grammatical error.
# Answer:
3. A. This could honestly go either way. There are so many good things and bad things that electronics can bring about.
4. B. Change consider to considered

Sovi.AI - AI Math Tutor

QUESTION IMAGE

Question

Explanation:

Answer: