Question

we got out of school early today, so james and i went over to the deli to get sandwiches. i got a large meatball with cheese. then, we played mini - golf until the guy working there said we were too loud and told us we had to leave. when i got home, i saw that my math homework wasnt in my folder, so my dad made me go all the way back to school. it was kind of embarrassing to ask my teacher for it. definition of focus: to focus is to write exclusively about one moment or idea in order to fully develop it. get focused and show the emotion! the writer of this passage identifies a number of moments, but does not focus on any. choose one small moment from this passage and copy it below. add three more sentences that stick with just this one moment and describe it even more precisely. consider adding details to help the reader picture what people did, said, and felt in this moment. write here...

Explanation:

Let's choose the moment of being told to leave the mini - golf place. We can add details about the tone of the worker, the reaction of the narrator and James, and their feelings. The original moment is "Then, we played mini - golf until the guy working there said we were too loud and told us we had to leave." Added sentences: The worker's voice was stern as he approached us, his brows furrowed in annoyance. James and I exchanged a surprised glance, our faces flushing with embarrassment. We quickly gathered our putters, feeling deflated as we walked out.

Answer:

Moment: Then, we played mini - golf until the guy working there said we were too loud and told us we had to leave.
Added sentences: The worker's voice was stern as he approached us, his brows furrowed in annoyance. James and I exchanged a surprised glance, our faces flushing with embarrassment. We quickly gathered our putters, feeling deflated as we walked out.