Question

question 1-14 passage: a college admissions essay claims that playing piano taught the writer discipline and leadership. however, it gi question: what revision would most strengthen the essays claim? add compliments from friends and family about the students personality. mention unrelated school achievements. replace the story with a list of extracurriculars. include a detailed account of preparing for a recital or leading a music group.

Explanation:

To strengthen the claim that playing piano taught discipline and leadership, details about relevant piano - related activities like preparing for a recital (showing discipline) or leading a music group (showing leadership) are most relevant. Compliments from friends and family about personality are not directly tied to the piano - related claim. Mentioning unrelated school achievements and replacing the story with a list of extracurriculars do not specifically support the claim about what playing piano taught.

Answer:

D. Include a detailed account of preparing for a recital or leading a music group.