Question

d. read the email responding to the advertisement below and circle the mistakes.
wanted! full-time manager for busy london sports equipment store. experience and good communication skills essential. send cv and photo to davidpercy@sportstuff.org.
to: davidpercy@sportstuff.org
from: jerry.jones@gmail.com
subject: i really, really want this job.
hey david,
im writing about the ad for a store manager for sportstuff listed on the findajob website. im 21 and ive just finished high school! im fluent in english and french and have several years retail experience.
i think id be a good candidate for this job because im hardworking and enjoy interacting with customers. im also knowledgeable about sports and athletic equipment.
see you later.
yours
jerry

Explanation:

1. Subject Line: The subject "I really, really want this job" is unprofessional and not concise for a job application. It should be more formal and relevant, like "Application for Store Manager Position".
2. Salutation: "Hey David" is too informal for a job application email. A more appropriate salutation would be "Dear David" or "Mr. Percy" (if the name format is known).
3. Lack of CV and Photo: The advertisement asks to send CV and photo, but the email does not mention attaching them or sending them as requested.
4. Grammar Mistake: "several year’s retail experience" has a grammar error. It should be "several years’ retail experience" (possessive form for multiple years).
5. Closing: "See you later" is too casual for a job application closing. A more professional closing like "Sincerely" or "Best regards" should be used, followed by proper formatting of the signature (usually full name, and sometimes contact info, though not always necessary here but the tone is the main issue with "See you later").

Answer:

• Subject: "I really, really want this job" (unprofessional, should be formal and job - related)
• Salutation: "Hey David" (too informal, should be more professional like "Dear David")
• No CV and photo attached/sent as per advertisement request
• Grammar: "several year’s retail experience" (should be "several years’ retail experience")
• Closing: "See you later" (too casual, should be professional like "Sincerely" or "Best regards")