Question

what change, if any, is necessary in the underlined portion in the following passage? meanwhile, estelle, was trying to figure out what forest frannie should say to the bear cub, when she found it. (paragraph 8) meanwhile; estelle, figuring out to the bear cub when she found them.

Explanation:

The original sentence has an unnecessary comma after "Meanwhile". Also, the "it" in "when she found it" should refer to the "bear - cub". Since there's no other plural entity for "them" to refer to, changing "it" to "them" is incorrect. The phrase "to the bear cub, when" has an incorrect comma placement. Removing the comma makes the sentence flow better.

Answer:

to the bear cub when